New Home

[patolozka]

Title: New Home

Author: Patolozka

Word Count: 100

Beta-read: Jimmi (Slovak), Accioslash

Rating(s): G

Challenge: Written for snarry100 prompt 383: Under the Stars.

Warning(s): None

Disclamer: Don't own the characters. No profit is being made from this story.

A/N: Only a kind of romance…

 

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They were lying in their bed; the heavy dark blue curtains were opened, only two spiral columns blocked their view of the glowing fireplace. Severus´s fingers were lazily playing with his husband´s hair. Harry was nearly dropping off. He was exhausted after the full day even though their new house welcomed them fondly. He was grateful that they were wizards. Moving had to be terrible for Muggles. He sighed. Severus turned his head and looked at him.

“I feel so good under the stars...”

“You mean – under the canopied bed,” Harry objected.

“No, under the stars... in your eyes.”

 

A/N2: In Czech canopied bed means bed with heaven (literally), so I don´t know if it´s clear... It was a momentary idea.

 

Comments

Excellent!

[suzanne_scot_girl_012]

I love the imagery and the sense of peace and contentment that permeates this piece.

Using the Czech concept of a canopied bed as a 'bed with heaven' is a perfect use of this prompt, and a great way to teach us about your culture!

Thanks for all your contributions to the fandom ~ I'm an English speaker and I am too scared to post any of my useless attempts to write fic ~ I really enjoy yur work!

*hugs you*

Re: Excellent!

[patolozka]

Oh, I was scared too, and I still am when some of my tales or new chapters shall go out... But I have learnt by time. Writing is amazing and I like it very much. And I love Harry and Severus, so... they are unlucky that I have been often playing with them:-)
Thank you! I am glad that you like it:-)

Re: Excellent!

[suzanne_scot_girl_012]

Hi, patolozka,

You are right that practicing helps. I am really pleased that you are part of the Snarry fandom ~ and I think Severus and Harry would agree!

My compliments to you for all your fine work and continued efforts. Please share more of the Czech culture with us through your work!

Your English is really excellent considering all you must have learned to be so proficient. I could never learn Czech! I looked at your LJ page in Czech and was totally baffled! So I have a lot of respect for you as an author in English.

Keep writing!

Re: Excellent!

[patolozka]

Hi there, you mean patolozka.cz? Yes I am pround of it:-)))) It´s my life, I think:-)

Thank you for your support I appreciate it a lot!

Yes I have been planning to share more but I am waiting for beta-reading:-) I have 3 more stories in my drawer and I am trying to write for snarry100 prompts every week:-)

Could I ask you for something? I know that it is impertinent but I need to check my first four posted drabbles. I am ashamed by it... Could you?
I would by really grateful!
Paw
Pat.

Re: drabbles

[suzanne_scot_girl_012]

Of course I am happy to check over your drabbles!

Please tell me where to find them ~ the ones you want me to read over.

What are the titles and what would you like me to look at? Spelling, grammar?

I have time right now, so please let me know how I can help you!

[adafrog]

awww...

[patolozka]

Thanks for comment:-)

[elmyraemilie]

That's lovely. I love the literal translation of the canopy--a beautiful metaphor.

[patolozka]

Thank you! I am so sorry that in English it sounds differently but never mind:-)

[elmyraemilie]

It makes a strong word-picture, so no apologies! I too am impressed with your command of English. We who were raised speaking English struggle with it sometimes, and you speak it very well!

[patolozka]

Oh, thank you:-) It could be one and half year of very intense translating or because I like your language and I prefer films in original than dubbing, and songs... Oh how I love some songs! Romantic soul...
And English is everywhere. I would like to manage French as well, but I have no time for it, even though I had it for 5 years at school. But it was before university and 8 years of different udecation are 8 years, you know...

[mrs_sweetpeach]

How interesting, the literal meaning of canopied bed in Czech. I'm glad you explained as I wouldn't have known and it's a delightful thought. It also occurs to me that for Wizards, they could spell the inside of the canopy to reveal the heavens overhead. It would be a lovely sight, don't you agree?

[patolozka]

Oh, yeah, I would like to have this bed too:-) Thank you!

[sheankelor]

Oh, what a wonderful meaning. This is a nice calm interlude, a wonderful moment. Thanks for showing it too us.

[patolozka]

A play with words, I like it a lot! Thank you!