New Home

Aug. 13th, 2013 04:36 pm
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Title: New Home

Author: Patolozka

Word Count: 100

Beta-read: Jimmi (Slovak), Accioslash

Rating(s): G

Challenge: Written for snarry100 prompt 383: Under the Stars.

Warning(s): None

Disclamer: Don't own the characters. No profit is being made from this story.

A/N: Only a kind of romance…



They were lying in their bed; the heavy dark blue curtains were opened, only two spiral columns blocked their view of the glowing fireplace. Severus´s fingers were lazily playing with his husband´s hair. Harry was nearly dropping off. He was exhausted after the full day even though their new house welcomed them fondly. He was grateful that they were wizards. Moving had to be terrible for Muggles. He sighed. Severus turned his head and looked at him.

“I feel so good under the stars...”

“You mean – under the canopied bed,” Harry objected.

“No, under the stars... in your eyes.”


A/N2: In Czech canopied bed means bed with heaven (literally), so I don´t know if it´s clear... It was a momentary idea.



Date: 2013-08-13 03:52 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] suzanne_scot_girl_012
I love the imagery and the sense of peace and contentment that permeates this piece.

Using the Czech concept of a canopied bed as a 'bed with heaven' is a perfect use of this prompt, and a great way to teach us about your culture!

Thanks for all your contributions to the fandom ~ I'm an English speaker and I am too scared to post any of my useless attempts to write fic ~ I really enjoy yur work!

*hugs you*

Re: Excellent!

Date: 2013-08-13 04:28 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] suzanne_scot_girl_012
Hi, patolozka,

You are right that practicing helps. I am really pleased that you are part of the Snarry fandom ~ and I think Severus and Harry would agree!

My compliments to you for all your fine work and continued efforts. Please share more of the Czech culture with us through your work!

Your English is really excellent considering all you must have learned to be so proficient. I could never learn Czech! I looked at your LJ page in Czech and was totally baffled! So I have a lot of respect for you as an author in English.

Keep writing!

Re: drabbles

Date: 2013-08-13 05:51 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] suzanne_scot_girl_012
Of course I am happy to check over your drabbles!

Please tell me where to find them ~ the ones you want me to read over.

What are the titles and what would you like me to look at? Spelling, grammar?

I have time right now, so please let me know how I can help you!

Date: 2013-08-13 10:13 pm (UTC)
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Date: 2013-08-14 03:03 am (UTC)
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That's lovely. I love the literal translation of the canopy--a beautiful metaphor.

Date: 2013-08-14 11:41 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] elmyraemilie
It makes a strong word-picture, so no apologies! I too am impressed with your command of English. We who were raised speaking English struggle with it sometimes, and you speak it very well!

Date: 2013-09-23 08:57 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] mrs_sweetpeach
How interesting, the literal meaning of canopied bed in Czech. I'm glad you explained as I wouldn't have known and it's a delightful thought. It also occurs to me that for Wizards, they could spell the inside of the canopy to reveal the heavens overhead. It would be a lovely sight, don't you agree?

Date: 2013-10-20 02:18 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] sheankelor
Oh, what a wonderful meaning. This is a nice calm interlude, a wonderful moment. Thanks for showing it too us.


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